In many societies elderly people often live in retirement homes This is not appropriate because families should always care for their aging members Do you agree

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In many societies, elderly people often live in retirement homes. This is not appropriate because families should always care for their aging members. Do you agree?

senior citizens are often sent to live in retirement homes. Many people say that this seems unethical because old people should always be taken care of by their children at home. I totally disagree with this idea because professionals in retirement homes give better care to the elderly and older people will find it easier to make friends when they live in these places.

The elderly will benefit from better healthcare with the help of caregivers, nurses and doctors. this is because children do not have much knowledge about good diets and early signs of diseases to keep their parents healthy at home. Hence, sending older people to retirement homes means that these worries will be eased by professionals. For example, a study of the University of Society in Ho Chi Minh City shows that citizens living in retirement homes have better health in general compared to those taken care of by their children at home.

Furthermore, it is more enjoyable when staying in retirement homes because older people can easily make friends and have conversations with others. this is because these people are mostly in the same generation and they usually share the same ideas and interests. Therefore, they can just engage in conversations with everybody and enjoy their moments. For instance, research in the home of The old in Hanoi indicated that 95% of members living in this place felt happy as they could talk and drink coffee with others every day.

In conclusion, sending aging members in families to retirement homes may seem inappropriate; however, it is for the good of senior citizens as they will get the best care for their health and become more satisfied with their lives by being able to have conversations and have fun every day.

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Average: 8.4 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, however, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1454.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94557823129 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53233062863 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513605442177 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.6717030876 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.166666667 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41666666667 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306087724965 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119594236949 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716738477758 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205472717799 0.151304729494 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0919183468135 0.056905535591 162% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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