Many teenagers now have their own smart phone. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.
An increasing number of adolescents now-a-days have iPhones and other smart devices. While the smart devices can improve cognitive skills, I believe that they distract youngsters and make them
indulge in other vulgar activities.
The main advantage of personal ownership of iPhones by young people, is that it improves their mental skills
greatly which in turns lead to overall development of them. This makes them more intelligent than
before which means younger generation would be innovative and will produce surprising inventions and
discovery in coming years. For example, adolescents in Canada who uses smartphones performed 5% better in
research studies than those that do not use these phones.Despite this, I believe that this acquisition
encourages them to useother irrelevant content on Internet which makes them addicted to that
inappropriate websites.
Usage of Android and Apple devices by girls and boys implies they can get access to porn and other bad
websites readily. This will distract them from studies and make them addicted to those irrelevancy due to
their age. They can also be encouraged to delinquency by the latest broadcasting content on web. For example, a recent study in China claimed around 10% of their youth who own smartphones are being distracted from study and addicted to vulgar web blogs. I believe that this makes use of smartphones by younger generation
unacceptable and they should only use it moderately in a positive way.
In conclusion, although latest mobile devices are innovative for teens, they also astray them and make
them addicted to misleading activities and they should only be used sparingly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1423.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45210727969 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81585476104 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574712643678 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.1946008685 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.363636364 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7272727273 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90909090909 7.06120827912 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 15.0 4.38176352705 342% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0953785510923 0.244688304435 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0410588471653 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0362506779155 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0270733875296 0.151304729494 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037688461873 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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