In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.
In the world of today, some people are of the opinion that animals should no longer be used and killed for food, fashion or medical industries. I find this idea partly agreeable as there is still a need to use animals for different purposes of life.
On the one hand, people have their valid points to prove for the unnecessarily killing and abusing animals for industries. It is undeniable that the world is significantly developing and we have found alternative ways to produce food. For instance, scientists recently have come up with plant-based meat and artificial meat that contains an equal amount of nutrition, such as fat, protein or vitamins, compared to regular meat. If we can produce and expand the use of this invention in mass scale, butchers and cattle will no longer be needed and animals can have their free lives like they used to have before in the ecosystem, and actually deserves for that. Regarding the aspect of clothing production, using artificial fabrics from plants and chemicals for the daily cloth has been increasingly popular. In fact, not only man-made garments are sustainable to use, but it also has a definitely better outlook, in comparison with ones made from animals’ fur and skin. Concerning the medical perspective, Artificial Intelligent has been largely developed to a level that it can help humans to analysis and evaluate side effects and the safety level; therefore, animal testing is unnecessary. Furthermore, traditional medicines made from animals like cobra or rhino’s horn have been proved by specialists and scientists to be useless and have no actual benefits.
On the other hand, animals are still useful to be used to produce products serving human daily lives. First of all, meat-eaters make up 70% of the world population, so a ban on killing animals for meat seems to be unreasonable. Also, as if millions of butchers and cattle were not allowed to milk their cash cows, they would be pushed to unemployment with millions of people losing their job and being unable to make end meets. Next, in the fashion industry, some areas with extreme weather like North America or African still need to use animals’ skin and fur to prevent themselves from the deadly cold and hot weather. For example, in Canada, although people are aware of the cruelty of killing geese for the fur to make winter jackets, they still have no choice but using it, due to its irrefutable effectiveness. Lastly, in the medical aspect, there is no doubt that animal testing is still necessary as it helps humans to ensure that new treatments are safe to use with no side effects or risks. It is undoubtedly true that humans should be prioritized over animals and it is better to have an animal suffer, rather than a human to die.
In conclusion, although abusing animals for the production of food, clothing and medicine are considered to be cruel, we still need to keep doing it as humans’ lives still depend heavily on those activities.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, if, lastly, look, regarding, so, still, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 13.1623246493 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 10.4138276553 259% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 41.998997996 167% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2501.0 1615.20841683 155% => OK
No of words: 503.0 315.596192385 159% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97216699801 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75022667142 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 176.041082164 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508946322068 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 798.3 506.74238477 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.6144549467 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.944444444 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9444444444 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7222222222 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221554085648 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847887909653 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496464673533 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162641198784 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385950144083 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 78.4519038076 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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