More and more children are addicted to electronic games. To what extent do you agree that parents should control children’s freedom so as not to let children get in touch with electronic games?
With the advent of electronic games, children spend so much time playing these games so much so that they are addicted to them. As a result, most people are calling on parents to prohibit their wards from playing these games. While this will have some positive impacts, it's negative effects will be more.
One positive side of not allowing children play electronic games is that they will have more time to spend on their academics and other important aspects of their development. Children spend a lot of time on computer and video games that they forget to do the home works or read their books. Some even shun going to school, because they want to play games the entire day. Stopping them from playing these games therefore, would allow them to devote more time on their studies and other important aspects of their life.
On the other hand, some children might revolt against their parents for denying them access to these games. Such young ones can even take to some social vices just to get at their parents. Also, experts have shown that electronic games help to develop children's analytical skills. Therefore, stopping them from getting in touch with these games implies that this aspect of their development will be impaired.
In conclusion, I disagree that parents should deny their children access to electronic games. Doing so will affect some aspect of their development as well as encourage some to take on some form of crime. What can be done however, is to ensure that they balance out their time over these games, their studies and some other aspects of their development.
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'while', 'in conclusion', 'as a result', 'as well as', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.218855218855 0.247107183377 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.171717171717 0.155533422707 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0808080808081 0.0946595960268 85% => OK
Adverbs: 0.047138047138 0.0501214627716 94% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0875420875421 0.0437548338989 200% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.127946127946 0.122226691241 105% => OK
Participles: 0.047138047138 0.0403226058552 117% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.23405719937 2.80594681477 80% => OK
Infinitives: 0.047138047138 0.0326793684256 144% => OK
Particles: 0.003367003367 0.00163938923432 205% => OK
Determiners: 0.0740740740741 0.0861772015684 86% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.03367003367 0.021408717616 157% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.003367003367 0.011925033212 28% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1596.0 1933.35771543 83% => OK
No of words: 272.0 316.048096192 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.86764705882 6.12580529183 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20517956788 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.297794117647 0.374742101984 79% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.220588235294 0.28420135186 78% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.132352941176 0.203846283523 65% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0661764705882 0.137316102897 48% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.23405719937 2.80594681477 80% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 176.037074148 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496323529412 0.56093040696 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.6069962585 60.7387585426 78% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0891783567 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.4285714286 20.7743622355 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.2883296049 49.517814964 57% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 127.492653851 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 20.7743622355 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.785714285714 0.814263465372 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.99599198397 0% => OK
Readability: 41.487394958 49.1944974215 84% => OK
Elegance: 1.28571428571 1.69124875643 76% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380084644291 0.332605444948 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.118280071197 0.102741220458 115% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0841176572143 0.0668466124924 126% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.552838049973 0.534860350844 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.125786848875 0.148594505496 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.175351175147 0.134430193775 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0899140029736 0.0742795772207 121% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.419217303626 0.324371583561 129% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0377916593011 0.0638462369009 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284218948488 0.228012699653 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030919453201 0.058150111329 53% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.68436873747 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 5.90881763527 135% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.5751503006 116% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.4468937876 115% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.