Nowadays a few people take their family with them abroad whenever they go on a business trip. Is it a positive or negative development in your opinion? To what extent do you support this development?
There is an ongoing trend of including families while going on an official visit to foreign countries. I believe it is a negative development and organizations should be cautious in dealing with such situations. This essay will discuss possible mishandling of information and how presence of household aids in attaining equilibrium between work and life along with relevant examples to support the points.
There is ample evidence indicating the benefit of having family on official trip. The central reason for this is, it allows employees to maintain a certain work life-balance. Corporate jobs leave very little time for individuals to spend with their family and friends. This is because of ever increasing competition at office and striving to climb up the hierarchy. Nevertheless, allowing staff to invite their families on work trips will allow them to spend some quality time at a changed location which rejuvenates the personnel when they report back to job. To illustrate this, an internal test report conducted by the IHR has observed that there is a 20% increased productivity in employees who returned with families versus a decreased 10% productivity in others. Therefore it is conclusively clear that it serves multipurpose when families are taken along.
Although there is a case for healthy work-life balance the threat to confidential information cannot be understated. The employees usually possess confidential material such as price quotations of bids, financials of the company etc whilst touring on business purposes.In addition to this, there is a risk of information leak with family and kids around which can be advantageous to competitors. For instance, the recent unsuccessful attempt by WIPRO in acquiring a firm in Ireland is due to the competitors quoting a lower price. Thus it possible to state that there is a potential threat to company’s information when families are taken along.
To sum it up, in my view despite the benefit of increased performance on return, the drawbacks such as the cost of risking the information to competitors eclipses the advantages of having employee’s immediate family around on official visits.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: In
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Suggestion: Thus,
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...um it up, in my view despite the benefit of increased performance on return, the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in addition, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35087719298 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07442757618 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581871345029 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.0087061182 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13333333333 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16544665663 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052448873167 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358290670645 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0890038281739 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535842939751 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 288, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r family and friends. This is because of ever increasing competition at office an...
^^
Line 2, column 771, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...a decreased 10% productivity in others. Therefore it is conclusively clear that it serves...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 269, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...etc whilst touring on business purposes.In addition to this, there is a risk of in...
^^
Line 3, column 531, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... the competitors quoting a lower price. Thus it possible to state that there is a po...
^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mation when families are taken along. To sum it up, in my view despite the ben...
^^^
Line 5, column 45, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...um it up, in my view despite the benefit of increased performance on return, the ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in addition, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35087719298 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07442757618 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581871345029 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.0087061182 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13333333333 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16544665663 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052448873167 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358290670645 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0890038281739 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535842939751 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.