Nowadays, it is possible to move ocean creatures from their natural habitat at sea and have them relocated to marine parks for the purpose of education and entertainment. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Explain your reasons and support them with specific examples.
Capturing creatures and showcasing it to audience has increased since the turn of the century. I believe that disruption caused to ecological balance by forced migration of marine animals to aquatic parks along with the cost incurred, eclipses the opportunity for the people to view them in real life. In this essay I will discuss the aforementioned points in detail along with examples from Oxford University and an opinion poll carried out BBC Australia.
There is ample evidence that aqua animals in a park are highly regarded among people for multiple reasons. The central reason for this is two fold, primarily, it is one of greatest amusements for people to view various creatures of sea within touching distance. Besides it being a such rare experience, it also serves as an educational purpose and motivate children to take up a career in subjects related to marine life. To illustrate this, aquatic park experience in Brisbane has come on top with 70% votes as the most memorable among the other national parks and safaris in an opinion poll conducted by the BBC Australia Channel. Therefore, it is conclusively clear that having creatures of that nature in their state act as a motivation to pursue a career about them.
Although there is a case of sea animals in park acting as a motivator to young minds, the impact ocean food chain cannot be understated. Removing a predator from the ocean results in increase of local fish and a possibility of that specie ceasing to exist. Furthermore, the cost of involved in capturing a sea animal is relatively higher than capturing an animal on land. Lives lost during an unsuccessful expedition should also be added to the cost which completely negates the benefits of having a creature of sea in a controlled space. To give an example, an Oxford University report states that in the year 2019 over 15 members have lost their lives in the process of hunting down the marine animals. Thus it is possible to there are repercussions on the ecology as well as human lives while capturing a sea animal.
To sum up, the monetary cost and lost human lives in relocation of marine animals outbalances the advantages such as the amusement of citizens.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, such as, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1827.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 374.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88502673797 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75372642736 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548128342246 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.6582302031 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.8 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9333333333 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209040064193 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.067423830902 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0278893069297 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118318904702 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401299734529 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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