Nowadays, more and more older people who need employment compete with the younger people for the same jobs. What problems this causes? What are the solutions?

Essay topics:

Nowadays, more and more older people who need employment compete with the younger people for the same jobs. What problems this causes? What are the solutions?

With regards to economic problems in these days, job market become more competitive as older people start to apply for the job opportunities as younger people. Although this could bring several severe issues, there would be some feasible solutions to tackle these problems.

There are plenty of negative side effects can come out in competition between young and old job seekers. First of all, old applicants have accumulate lots of experiences which lead them to win the competition when job background have straight impact. It could bring some social problems with regard to increasing unemployment rate among young generation, which could lead to social unrest and crime escalation. On the other side, if skills in some certain fields, such as marketing and sale, become more essential, young applicant would be the winner while their versatility and creativity are their winning tickets. It could cause poverty for the older competitor who lose, so that they will be not able to provide adequate financial support for their families.

Tackling with mentioned issues, government should take some immediate steps. One possible action could be setting some new policies to support retired persons with sufficient social benefit, old-age pensions and medical care. Therefore, they could enjoy their retirement age without any worries about the future. Other positive solution could be putting some deterrent rules against hiring older applicant when there is a younger candidate. So that there would be no competition. As a result, social satisfaction will rise also young people could achieve their desirable career consequently.

In Overall, mentioned situation could bring many discomfort to both age group and it is government responsibility to thinking ahead and always be prepare to solve such problems.

Votes
Average: 7 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 140, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'accumulated'.
Suggestion: accumulated
...kers. First of all, old applicants have accumulate lots of experiences which lead them to ...
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Line 5, column 442, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...cant when there is a younger candidate. So that there would be no competition. As a res...
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Line 7, column 45, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun discomfort seems to be countable; consider using: 'many discomforts'.
Suggestion: many discomforts
...verall, mentioned situation could bring many discomfort to both age group and it is government ...
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Line 7, column 137, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'be' and 'prepare'.
Suggestion: be always prepare
...nt responsibility to thinking ahead and always be prepare to solve such problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, so, therefore, while, such as, as a result, first of all, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1539.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45744680851 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66983599576 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620567375887 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1637357482 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.928571429 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1428571429 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139383272257 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478123098259 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613663770168 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0906366493929 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0749046378796 0.056905535591 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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