Nowadays museums are mainly visited by foreigners or tourists, not by local people. Why do you think this is the case? What can be done to attract local visitors?
It is often argued that the attractions are necessary to increase the economy of our society as a tourism. Some people might think that many historical places such as museums are mostly come over by people who live other nations and visit there occassionally, not by native individuals these days. This essay will address the perspective of visiting museums and suggest the problems and solutions.
First of all, going museums are not special to local people anymore. In other words, they are already educated about their country's history for many years in school because the subject is mandatory to be learned. Furthermore, some citizens may feel that coming over museums are meaningless because the majority of information in the attraction is fairly approchable for the local residents. For example, the animal, peacock is very hard to see in other continents such as Asia. However, they easily can be seen in the park in Victoria, so permanent residents of Victoria do not prefer to visit the museums.
On the other hand, there are some methods to resolve this issue. In order to reduce this phenomenon, government would implement a new policy that the number of students should visit historical attractions as a field trip then the use of local people will be increased. Moreover, the employers of museums are able to promote some different ways to be more attractive for their citizens. For instance, they would display some unique species and then promote the spaces with the provision of affordable price. Once these solutions begin, individuals may have the interests to visit the places to view how it looks like.
In conclusion, in spite of the fact that many local citizens might not be interested in visiting museums currently due to some internal reasons, they need to visit to rise up the economy of attractions. The officials and owners should offer some reasonable opportunities to encourage people to go there.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in other words, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08150470219 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69537429679 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554858934169 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4998876403 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.066666667 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6666666667 7.06120827912 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252160781099 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810475377871 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591376908458 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156308113943 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0120880859166 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in other words, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08150470219 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69537429679 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554858934169 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4998876403 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.066666667 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6666666667 7.06120827912 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252160781099 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810475377871 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591376908458 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156308113943 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0120880859166 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.