Nowadays parents are sending their children on trips abroad for educational purposes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Essay topics:

Nowadays parents are sending their children on trips abroad for educational purposes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

To modern parents what raises level of education of their children is sending them overseas to gain new skills and better education. Drawing on observations, I would contend that perk of this is raising autonomy in them, however, setback is its being unsafe for most of the regions.

Before considering self-independence development it is important to note that child is safer near his or her family. Evidently, it is caring parents that are the most important people to be there when accidents, such as being lost in woods, occur to him or her. The reason why their being there so crucial is that they will do their best better than anyone else to save him or her from hazard. Therefore, the city where child should be educated is the city where his or her family live, for safety purposes.

Notwithstanding unhealthy situations, what is quite important for parent is seeing independent teenager. Undoubtedly, to some children it is being away from adults that hold pivotal importance in becoming autonomous in life. This is because of the fact that they do not feel any responsibilities, namely house chores, while parents do them at home. Thus, sending them abroad is the best way to force them to gain those skills.

In conclusion, studying in distant country has a plausible effect on children’s ability of taking responsibilities and gaining autonomy in life, however, it also has possible safety difficulties due to absence of parents in unforeseen accidents that may occur while being in unneighborly place.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 234, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...in becoming autonomous in life. This is because of the fact that they do not feel any responsibilities, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1287.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10714285714 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98664829319 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611111111111 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5427272045 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9090909091 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36363636364 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223725261417 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0813537215765 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643686803848 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131624464437 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656001249653 0.056905535591 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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