In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Essay topics:

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Transportation had increased in the past few years. In 1890, a people who wanted to go other places usually used an animal such as horses or cow. Whereas, in this era, transportation has been changing drastically. People nowadays use a fast train to visit other places. This gives a new perspective for some country to spend enormous money on new railway construction to connect between cities. While, other countries believed that spending a large of money to improve many public types of transport. I believe that spending a large of money to construct a fast train will be a great idea. Whereas, spending money to develop existing public transport will be achieved effortlessly nowadays.

On the one hand, the fast train has become a terrific idea to fulfil the demand of the mass transportation. Further, people will find a benefit from this transportation. The fast train becomes economical friendly and also reduce a time of the journey. Although, there is a huge potential benefit from this transportation. The construction of this fast transport will require so much time in preparation. The engineer who builds this transport should do some research first. Due to these conditions, gives an impact in construction's schedule. Take a fast train Jakarta-Bandung, for instance, the construction had been developed since 2013 in Indonesia. However, this condition nearly achieves fifty percent of the entire progress.

On the other hand, public transport is an alternative way to support people from movement. Furthermore, public transport also becomes an identity from a country. The better public transport means the greater development in that country. An electric train, for instance, in Indonesia an electric train has developed drastically, from the train itself and other supporting sectors such as the station, the method of payment and also the rail. This development indicates that Indonesia's government will ready to take a part in developing country. This condition does not only beneficial for people but also the economic sector.

To sum up, spending a lot of money to construct a new railway for a fast train is a great idea. However, spending a large of money more essential because of increase in existing transport is spent less much time.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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... and also reduce a time of the journey. Although, there is a huge potential benefit from...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, whereas, while, for instance, such as, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1908.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22739726027 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00499865037 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495890410959 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 577.8 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 2.52805611222 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.9076980057 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.32 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 3.4128256513 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403869118391 0.244688304435 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115656630446 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106061009249 0.0667982634062 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278017560674 0.151304729494 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.151923980813 0.056905535591 267% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.46 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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