The number of people interested in cosmetic surgery is increasing in order to improve their physical appearance. Why do people do operations to change the way they look? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
In this modern world, folks would like to look more attractive in terms of their physical appearance due to this cosmetic surgery has been mushrooming, the main reasons behind these are need of the society and inner burning desire to look spectacular. This phenomenon has abundant demerits which I will elaborate more with suitable illustrations in the following paragraph.
First and foremost, the prominent reason is need of the community like individuals are attracted by awesome personality. Even in this modern world, people has been finding outer beauty than inner beauty, because of this most of person spend a lot of amount to look different. For example, one survey declared that cosmetic surgery has proliferated by 35% than past few years. Secondly, in recent time human being allured to post selfie on social media owing to these they make changes in their original look to get enormous likes. Thus, folks make alter in their appearance.
Nevertheless, the disadvantages are not only waste of money but also risk of life. If you want to do such changes then it will cost high. Unless you do not spend money , you cannot change your appearance. Secondly, sometimes you also have high risk of your life. Because these are manmade treatment which can lead to serious illness owing to these you can lost your life. For instance, recently one Korean celebrity died only at the age of 29 due to infection after surgery. Hence, these trend having potential risk.
In conclusion, although it is temptation to look awesome, it has high level risk for life. So people must follow any trend with all pre-caution either they can avoid.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 242, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun amount seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of amounts'.
Suggestion: a lot of amounts
...y, because of this most of person spend a lot of amount to look different. For example, one sur...
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Line 2, column 247, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cause of this most of person spend a lot of amount to look different. For example...
^^
Line 3, column 84, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...y waste of money but also risk of life. If you want to do such changes then it wil...
^^
Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...cost high. Unless you do not spend money , you cannot change your appearance. Seco...
^^
Line 3, column 264, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s you also have high risk of your life. Because these are manmade treatment which can l...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 357, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'lose'
Suggestion: lose
... serious illness owing to these you can lost your life. For instance, recently one K...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1366.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98540145985 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57960468494 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616788321168 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.5580679913 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.375 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.125 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6875 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184646471364 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0537296915185 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585270458478 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0974676287868 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0146428230367 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 242, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun amount seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of amounts'.
Suggestion: a lot of amounts
...y, because of this most of person spend a lot of amount to look different. For example, one sur...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 247, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cause of this most of person spend a lot of amount to look different. For example...
^^
Line 3, column 84, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...y waste of money but also risk of life. If you want to do such changes then it wil...
^^
Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...cost high. Unless you do not spend money , you cannot change your appearance. Seco...
^^
Line 3, column 264, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s you also have high risk of your life. Because these are manmade treatment which can l...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 357, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'lose'
Suggestion: lose
... serious illness owing to these you can lost your life. For instance, recently one K...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1366.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98540145985 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57960468494 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616788321168 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.5580679913 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.375 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.125 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6875 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184646471364 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0537296915185 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585270458478 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0974676287868 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0146428230367 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.