Obesity is a serious problem in many countries, especially in rich countries. Discuss ways to solve the problem. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is an undeniable fact that the world today is facing a huge challenge related to obesity, especially among the younger generation. Both, the developed as well as developing countries have been recording a steady upsurge of over-weight people. This negative development is adversely affecting the health of the society, and therefore need to be addressed immediately by the government and the citizens before it is too late.
There are numerous measures that can be taken to alleviate the problems related to obesity. Public awareness, firstly, is the most obvious step to encounter this problem. People need to understand the importance of being fit and the negative implications of excessive weight on the health. They must be aware of the ways and means to reduce the weight. Schools and universities, furthermore, must include a mandatory subject as part of their curriculum detailing out the importance of fitness and the ways to achieve it.
Additional taxes, secondly, must be imposed on junk foods and carbonated drinks that do nothing other than acting as a catalyst in putting-up the weight. Therefore, imposing strict food regulations and inflating the prices might also be a quick solution. Fitness centers and amusement parks, thirdly, must also be easily accessible to the middle-class and lower-class people who cannot afford expensive memberships. Government authorities, must sanction additional budget for construction of new health centers and fitness parks. In this way, the people can access them easily and focus on their fitness for free. Above all, public service advertisements and awareness must be nurtured among the people to use bicycles or walk instead of using private cares to travel for work. This way, they can lose some weight, stay active, and fit.
From the above argument, it can be concluded that the obesity is a silent killer and has had devastating impact on the health of our society. Therefore, it is high time for the people and the government to understand the gravity of the situation and take proactive measures to deal with this pernicious problem.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 155, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
...younger generation. Both, the developed as well as developing countries have been recordin...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24556213018 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86940306824 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579881656805 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3328168061 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.294117647 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8823529412 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0595960023117 0.244688304435 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0231827692986 0.084324248473 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0257863664203 0.0667982634062 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0431196191114 0.151304729494 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285942691756 0.056905535591 50% => OK
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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