Ordinary people try to copy famous people either reading magazines or watching TV. Why do they do this? Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people

It has become common today that normal people are copying celebrities by watching television through ads or from magazines. They imitate these people to become famous among their friends by not considered as old fashioned and living with the current trends help them with job and also in society. In my opinion, I think following fashion helps people to avoid bullying from surrounding people but it must be followed in a limited manner.
On one hand, it is observed that today's generation are bringing a mass change in themselves not only in hairstyle but also wearing costly clothes to live a better life in society. These trends help young people in college or going for a job interview where fashion shows their concern towards their life.
On the other hand, internet is spoiling people by various online shopping methods by luring through celebrities on offering special discounts. Ordinary people are mostly attracted towards it by spending a lot of money using their essential money used for daily purpose or ask their parents to take a loan and pay the amount. This is not only destroying peoples lives by taking away their small happiness where young ones opt for bad behavior like stealing money or go for jobs to get fast money. In an instance, most people in The UK are found to hunt for odd jobs to live a high celebrity life.
In conclusion, although magazines or tv are attracting people to live in society by helping them stay with the current trends and be updated by not considering as backward. These also harm people by making them go for a high salary job or adapt methods for instant money. In my opinion, fashion must be followed by taking concerns in consideration not as competition.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 418, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a limited manner" with adverb for "limited"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...rounding people but it must be followed in a limited manner. On one hand, it is observed that toda...
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Line 2, column 34, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
...nner. On one hand, it is observed that todays generation are bringing a mass change i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1418.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80677966102 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5308575372 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562711864407 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.820132516 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.166666667 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5833333333 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183612312703 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745529102441 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455999198144 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11583639771 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0636439159896 0.056905535591 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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