Organized tour to remote community and other countries is increasingly popular. Is it a positive or negative development for the local people and environment?
Nowadays due to increased family incomes, people are travelling more to newer places both domestic and international. This longing to discover new places, people are organizing tour to remote communities around the world. In my opinion this is a negative trend.
To embark on, visiting remote communities like tribal areas in Africa or in Myanmar et cetera exposes these tribes different types of threats. Firstly, with increasing tourism more and more people will visit these places which will cause more pollution and littering. Secondly, there is also a probability of exposing these tribes to culture extinction. Because, local communities might get influenced by the tourists and try to adapt their culture and way of lifestyle. Thirdly, local wild life and vegetation are also vulnerable to destruction. The example substantiating this statement is, as tourism flourished in remote African wild life areas, travelers bribed the local authorities to hunt wild animals, aftermath of which was , the lions and rhinoceros were hunted down to extinction.
Furthermore, apart from all these potential perils, there is also intrusion in local customs and traditions too. The people are can get attracted toward the clothes of foreigners leading loss of local clothing style. Adding further, there can be invasion in religion beliefs too. The local communities can get mass conversion to religion of people visiting to those areas because of their affluence.
To conclude, I would reiterate my decision that this type of tourism is a negative trend. Because there is lot on stake of the remote communities and which should not be disturbed. Instead, these places should be left untouched as India has done with North Centennial Islands in Bay of Bengal.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, apart from, as to, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1487.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36823104693 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79992245562 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58844765343 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.0956421811 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9375 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3125 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8125 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205934301797 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0647585069872 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538275469483 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126517972979 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570494897764 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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