Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
The World Cup football match and the Olympics are held worldwide with great national support and expectations.As a fan of those competitions, I agree with the idea that sporting events can be necessary for international relations and national unity.In this essay, I will think about the effects of these popular sporting events.
First of all, the World Cup, Olympics and other international games work for easing tensions among different nations.For example, South and North Korea have football games regularly which give two nations a chance to understand each other deeply.In the mid 1990s, a hundreds of North Korean supporters came to South Korea with the footballers and they were very excited during the sporting events.Even if it sounds ridiculous, many South Koreans were quite surprised at that moment when North Koreans shouted and cried during the match.We all realized that they were very normal sports fans even though they were occasionally very secretive.Through the sports, two divided nations could reduce their political and ideological tensions and could feel the patriotic unity.
On the other hand, some sports matches can make international relations worse.For instance, football or baseball games between Korea and Japan are always big matches in two countries where full of tensions overflow.Sometimes, after the matches, the two rivals blame each other and their patriotic emotions explode in an aggressive way.Even much worse scenario is that the troubles caused by losing games affect the players directly.
In conclusion, I think that international sporting occasions can be one of the good ways to ease tensions or to release patriotism safely.However, I believe that games can not be the fundamental ways for the sound patriotism or peaceful international relations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1589.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.90706319703 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.7822351302 2.80592935109 135% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60594795539 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 67.0 20.2975951904 330% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 204.346519422 49.4020404114 414% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 397.25 106.682146367 372% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 67.25 20.7667163134 324% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 26.5 7.06120827912 375% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250472544799 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171668052445 0.084324248473 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520203737495 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171668052445 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520203737495 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 40.0 13.0946893788 305% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -4.99 50.2224549098 -10% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.44779559118 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 30.6 11.3001002004 271% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 18.18 12.4159519038 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.19 8.58950901804 130% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 9.78957915832 301% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 28.8 10.1190380762 285% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 10.7795591182 288% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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