At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
Currently some nations around the globe have more young people as compared to the number of the elderly. From my perspective, this situation brings several beneficial consequences for the rapid development of the nation; however there are few demerits as well.
Industrialization in any country would require a large number of young people’s mind and energy. Either for the construction work of transport infrastructure or for the rapid development in the field of science and technology, the requirement of workforce would be unavoidable. Such workforce should possess an ability to work industriously, and this kind of characteristic is found only in the men at the age of 20-50. Therefore, underdeveloped countries, where the number of young people makes the larger fraction of their total population, can exploit them in transforming their nation into industrialized nation in a short period. For example, Indonesia has two-thirds of its population falling into the category of young adult people; hence they can employ them for developing several infrastructure essential for their nation.
On the other hand, there are some demerits also if the country fails to utilize them properly. For instance, in absence of employment opportunities, such age people are apt to involve in criminal activities, which creates a sense of insecurity among the residents. This would intimidate business persons, engineers, researchers, and other professionals, and ultimately they would migrate to other developed countries seeking a peaceful environment to live in. In Nepal, for instance, every year thousands of professionals are leaving to other nations since the country has been terrorized by the jobless teenagers and the adults, who have been kidnapping people for money.
In conclusion, adult’s population is boon for all nations, especially for poor countries, which could be utilized in the developmental process. Nonetheless, countries can suffer, unless they are provided with ample job opportunities.
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Suggestion: many; numerous
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Suggestion:
... provided with ample job opportunities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, nonetheless, so, therefore, third, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1719.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65460526316 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29571611634 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598684210526 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5472945647 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.230769231 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3846153846 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3846153846 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146433090762 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0585106741215 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513684745057 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0896112880173 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303379428425 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.79 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.82 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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