At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay topics:

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Over the last few years population imbalance in few of the countries in world have been trending immensely. While some this inequality of population distribution between young and elderly folks has certain downsides. It seems to me that benefits surpasses the drawbacks.

On one hand, there a major number of drawbacks of having large number of elderly people. Firstly, old people are amended with various pensions and schemes when they are unable to learn. As result, having huge population on this end of spectrum would put more load on government to support and provide them necessary facilities in old age. In addition to that, old people are generally not comfortable with latest technological advancements. As a result, are not able to adapt to rapid changes of modern times. Hence, having majority of population on higher age range is not good.

On the other hand, I believe the benefits are much more significant than any such disadvantages. To begin with, young working professionals are more energetic and driven to perform and excel in their life. As a result, they will contribute more towards the society by innovation and invention. Whereas, old people will not be able to work for long duration and would lack motivation to grow in future. Therefore, it's quite unambiguous that having large young adults is beneficial.

In conclusion, the obvious argument is in favor of having large number of young minds is better than old people. Although, having elderly folks can help in providing their experience and wisdom.I opine that young minds can contribute more and better towards the world than the other half.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: years'; year's
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Suggestion: with the latest
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Suggestion: in the future
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, so, therefore, whereas, while, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1372.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13857677903 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7256912947 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573033707865 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.2846349431 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.75 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6875 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167648189831 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546017773476 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621648836622 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100305562882 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030540174487 0.056905535591 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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