At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

In some countries, young adults account for a relatively large proportion of the population, compared with elderly people. From my perspective, the advantages of this situation outweigh its disadvantages.

On the one hand, a younger population can benefit a nation in several ways. First, young adults are healthy and well-educated workforce, which plays an important role in the development of a country. Without such a workforce, the industries in a country would face the problem of labor shortage and could not properly operate. In addition, a larger proportion of young adults also tends to alleviate the pressure on the state pension system and health care system, because they are less likely to get sick. As a result, more public money can be spent on other important sectors such as education, transport, and national security. Moreover, having a certain number of young adults assures that the population of a country can maintain at a healthy level, without worrying about the problem of an aging population. This is of great importance to the sustainable economic growth of a nation.

On the other hand, this situation may also bring about social problems. Since young adults are often more impulsive than the elderly, countries with a large proportion of young adults would expect a higher crime rate. As a result, this may lead to an increase on the security budget, putting pressure on governments and taxpayers. Furthermore, having too many young adults would bring a country to another extreme population problem, which is the population explosion. This often results in a general decrease in people's living standards and the exhaustion of natural resources.

To conclude, although having a relatively large number of young adults may bring about some social issues, it still significantly benefits a country in many aspects. In my opinion, the merits of this situation outweigh its drawbacks.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (2 votes)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, still, well, in addition, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1614.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27450980392 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87259920989 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532679738562 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4340156996 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.875 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0625 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303869105599 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907411125145 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716288519681 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204323490992 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04752518069 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, still, well, in addition, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1614.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27450980392 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87259920989 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532679738562 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4340156996 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.875 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0625 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303869105599 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907411125145 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716288519681 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204323490992 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04752518069 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.