It is true that the figure for people in young age is much higher than old age in some countries now. While I accept that this trend could have some drawbacks but I still believe that it cannot outweigh the benefits.
In the one hand, the rejuvenation in population age has some serious disadvantages. Firstly, there are a number of young people who do not have enough experience and knowledge for their jobs. For example, in manager situations, corporations could be led to bankrupt by young people take up these positions. Secondly, with the development of technology, unemployed is becoming more popular with young people. In fact, in some developing countries, the percentage of unemployed people was over 20%. Finally, the rise of young population is also the reason for the increase if crime such as stealth and scrimmage.
However, I would argue that these drawbacks are outweighed by the benefits. People in young age who do not have enough knowledge or experience could be skilled in the future by studying or working more. Additionally, it is undeniable that a significant rise of workforce was recorded thanks to a relatively large number of young adults. For instance, maritime jobs which require manual labor had a large figure for workers in some recent years. The increase in the number of young adults has also been linked in part to creative lifestyles and innovation of cultures. As an example, hip-hop is becoming more popular and bringing millions of dollars for USA because of this trend.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential advantages of the rise of young population are more significant than the possible dangers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1380.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81286389977 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532608695652 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 17.1847477594 49.4020404114 35% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.0 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266855429883 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859997875492 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391263469043 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156217993304 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436544153242 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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