Q ) Many people work long hours , leaving very little time for leisure activities .
Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages ?
A large number of people devote more time to work and are left with extremely less time to involve themselves in hobbies and leisure activities. In my opinion, working long hours can bring about problems for the health and social life of an individual compared to any advantages that it might bring .
Admittedly, there are some basic benefits of working all the time of the day.
Firstly, it can lead to success in professional life and can enhance the chances of promotion. This enables more income at their disposal and might lead to a better standard of living in the society. Secondly, As parents are role models for their children, sometimes children can learn important life skills like hardwork and dedication from their parents.
Nevertheless, the advantages stated above, I believe that people could suffer serious drawbacks from working most of the time in the day. one potential problem is that their health is bound to suffer to a great extent. At present, people are undergoing mental health problems like depression and anxiety owing to undue stress taken at work and not giving themselves a chance to unwind during leisure time. Also people who have a sitting job have developed problems like cervical, back pain, obesity and eyesight.
Another obvious issue of not engaging in a hobby is that their social life gets disrupted . In other words, people are deprived of the opportunity to reconnect with their friends or meet new people during leisure time. As a result, an individual’s interpersonal and emotional skills fail to develop. For example, with the advances in technology, people stay connected at home, prioritizing work even during family vacations and picnics and, for this reason, they get isolated from their immediate surroundings.
In conclusion, while there are plus points to having paying attention to work most of the time, too much would be suffered. Engaging in leisure activities is a must for de-stressing oneself and maintaining social relations .
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18518518519 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71764462521 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577160493827 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9814407803 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.875 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271179806042 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803282929488 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589813029742 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135151566086 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616286802833 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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