Q) Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we don't really need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is thought by some people that unnecessary spending is often caused by the bombardment of advertisements, while others opine that adverts provide information regarding the latest commodities in the market, thereby enriching the lives of people. In my opinion, I agree that promotion of goods and services in media encourages people to buy
Things that are not necessary.
To begin with, companies engaged in advertising often use images of luxury, glamour, and success, in order to increase people’s purchasing of unwanted products. As a result, girls highly influenced by models and actresses used in promotion, often waste their pocket money on expensive makeup brands, with a view to look like them. Moreover, most vulnerable audiences like children are unable to differentiate between adverts and actual TV programs, causing them to pester their parents for toys and gadgets, with which they might play for only a few hours.
Another point to consider is that adverts take advantage of consumer’s weakness to succumb to peer pressure, causing extra expenditure of their income on wasteful things.
In other words, people have the urge to keep up with the latest trends and clever advertisers know this, and, create promotions in such a way that people feel inferior if they can’t own a product. Mobile phones and other electronic gadgets are one of the best examples that people wish to buy as a result of their need to keep up with joneses.
In conclusion, advertising exerts an adverse influence on people’s minds, making them squander their money on unnecessary objects by appealing them with attractive images and instilling a sense of superiority of keeping up with the latest fashion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, moreover, regarding, so, still, while, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1444.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25090909091 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81266086776 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632727272727 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.7624085205 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.444444444 106.682146367 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5555555556 20.7667163134 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.4444444444 7.06120827912 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167087018401 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708157598059 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395636732207 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0790284686413 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442407052124 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.0946893788 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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