In recent years, the family structure and the role of its members are gradually changing. What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive or negative?

Essay topics:

In recent years, the family structure and the role of its members are gradually changing. What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive or negative?

It is true that the family pattern and the function of its members are progressively varying at the moment. There can be several type of changes occur, and I consider it to be very negative.
One of the main changes is that, most people become city dwellers due to effect of urbanization whereas living expenditures and circumstances are favorable for a small family. Thus, they would prefer to stay in a nuclear family, and maintain less family members because it could be economical and privacy supportive. A recent survey shows that in Bangladesh the rising rate of nuclear families are increased 20% within one decade. Another change is that both parents are the bread winners for their families, and they have to play equal role at home. It has become socially acceptable for women partners to engage in different occupations and pursue a career.
In my view, the changes described above can be harmful for a society. Many people leave traditional duty about caring elderly parents, because of pursuing the idea of a nuclear family. Thus, it is a common scenario in our society for elderly parents to stay at old age home rather than with families. At the same time, children and parents seem to be less close nowadays because both parents often work full time and spend less time with their offspring. Hence, children behaviour can be influenced by friends, television and the internet which leads them to experience with peer pressure and obesity related issues.
In conclusion, the changing of family shape and its member responsibilities are a result of wider changes of society, I believe that these can disadvantageous for elderly and children in a society.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun type seems to be countable; consider using: 'several types'.
Suggestion: several types
...ely varying at the moment. There can be several type of changes occur, and I consider it to ...
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Line 3, column 403, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...owadays because both parents often work full time and spend less time with their offsprin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, so, thus, well, whereas, in conclusion, in my view, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1394.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97857142857 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72770180607 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585714285714 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0029584548 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.230769231 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5384615385 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182490898741 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681798769543 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689166041175 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146053745861 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0776116968798 0.056905535591 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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