School teaching should focus on success on the workforce and less attention should be given to academic achievement, to what extent do you agree or disagree
Teaching method to pay attention between workforce and academic achievement is debatable. Although I agree with the statement above that educational technique should take care of the development of the workforce, I believe academic success is also crucial and should be treated equally.
To commence with, advocates to focus on successful workforce argue that this approach increases the self-confidence among students as they usually afraid while attending the first interview after graduation. Therefore, speaking contests should take place because students who participate in these activities are more likely to feel confident in their ability to speak in front of an audience. Moreover, it is often claimed that student gets the opportunity to know about office etiquette including answering the call and respect the authority which is important to build good character at the office premises.
On the other hand, there are several positives to give equal weight to academic achievement. The most important benefit is that academic grades provide the opportunity to fresh graduates to start their career with multinational companies because these organizations would like to hire those graduates who have an excellent academic record. A further positive is that theoretical accomplishment would enable the student to obtain scholarship program across the globe consequently, bright students could get higher education free of cost. A good example of this is that Florida academic program in the United States provides a scholarship program to students who have minimum 80% marks throughout academic years. A final benefit is that students with excellent grade earn the respect of their teachers and classmates, and they always remember with good wishes to progress. Thus, teachers to give equal importance to theoretical achievement and should not be neglected.
In conclusion, although workforce focus enables the student to become confident enough to perform well at the office, I presume the academic excellence is equally important as it will open the door for position holder students to join an international firm and attain the higher qualification to uplift their career.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1870.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63253012048 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94088679484 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584337349398 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.9910475509 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.833333333 106.682146367 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6666666667 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.91666666667 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174013324866 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720668110031 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671144649836 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126265049596 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0983105283484 0.056905535591 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 50.2224549098 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.67 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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