Your friend has just won a sizeable amount of money in the lottery. She would like your advice as to how to spend it. Write a letter to your friend. In your lettercongratulate him/her on their winGive practical advice on how to spend the moneyadvise him/h

Essay topics:

Your friend has just won a sizeable amount of money in the lottery. She would like your advice as to how to spend it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

congratulate him/her on their win

Give practical advice on how to spend the money

advise him/her on benefits/drawbacks associated with large wins

Dear Samarah,

I hope you are doing fine today.

I’ve just received your email that you won the draw, and asking my advice to deal with the available money. First of all, I am really glad to know that you won the big-ticket raffle draw of Dirham 10 million last month, so please accept my warmest congratulations on your win.

Yes, I have a couple of ideas which you could opt to make your life better. Firstly, I would suggest you buy an apartment in the downtown area and rent it out. It will cost you a very nominal amount at this point because most of the ex-pats have left the country; therefore, property value has decreased a lot in the country, so It would be a very lucrative investment for the future point of view. Secondly, you could open a café with a wide variety of foods because people are fond to eat food outside with kits and kin; however, try to choose a place for a shop which would be easy to access and have a parking facility.

Since your name has published in the local newspaper as a winner of the draw. You need to very care full with your surroundings as it could lead to theft; therefore, try to deposit all of the amounts in the bank as it a secure way to prevent any theft.

I hope the advice above would be helpful for you to take the next step.

Your Friend,

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Samarah, I hope you are doing fine today. I&apo...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 182, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ead to theft; therefore, try to deposit all of the amounts in the bank as it a secure way ...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1075.0 937.175257732 115% => OK
No of words: 247.0 206.0 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.35222672065 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27985914211 2.54303337028 90% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603238866397 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 330.3 290.88556701 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 16.3608247423 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.1077093413 44.8134815571 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.5 76.5299724578 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7 16.8248392259 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 4.34317383033 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175392604716 0.216113520407 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102329306831 0.0766984524023 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123323689016 0.0603063233224 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0806784462965 0.12726935374 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560113333626 0.0580467560999 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 8.37731958763 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.25 8.71597938144 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 8.54432989691 136% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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