Science advanced so much that It can now make it possible for people to live 100 years or even 200. some people think it is a good thing, other think that it is a bad thing. discuss both views and give your opinion
Medical science has increased the life expectancy from the past couple of decades. This achievement has positive consequences as well as negative. I strongly believe that it has resulted in some serious threats to our society.
Science and technology have radically changed the world we live in. They are affecting all aspects of our life and one of the major contributions is in the field of medicine. Advance technology has tremendously helped in detecting diseases at the early stages and medicine is curing them, which were incurable in the previous centuries. Consequently, this has resulted in better health and longer life. Hence, the benefits of it cannot be ignored. First and foremost, they have invaluable experience of a broader range of subjects, which are tested, in addition to this they know the big picture and know how to tackle the complicated situation in a couple of minutes. Secondly, as they are physically stronger because of health they can work longer years than before and will be able to support them. Additionally, this will increase their self esteem as they will feel useful and make a positive contribution to the community.
On the other hand, this has also posed some serious threats. With time cognitive and analytical skill of human beings deteriorate, they are not fast enough on making a decision, and scared to take risks. Secondly, this is a technology related world, they way business, industries and corporation’s works has changed. If you want to be competitive in the industry and take cutting-edge over rival, you need to be ahead of others, and that could be only achieved by learning new ways. But there is a saying that “you can’t teach old dog new tricks”. Thirdly, each company or business has fix hierarchical structure. There are only limited vocations in offices. If older generation will work after 60, the younger generation would not be hired by companies and corporation. This in turn increases stress, anxiety and depression. Companies will suffer too, as youngsters are more energetic, have innovative and creative ideas. In addition to this, they are open to new learning and has hands-on experience of the latest technologies.
In conclusion, I think science achievement in respect of longer life span should be appreciated as this is a major step forward. However, Increased life span will deprive new generation of their rights and will this consequently create a holistic environment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 607, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'fixed'.
Suggestion: fixed
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2080.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 400.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96863183975 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5725 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 5.43587174349 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.8274152851 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6666666667 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0527075946174 0.244688304435 22% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0157842630297 0.084324248473 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.022254728273 0.0667982634062 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0361274009969 0.151304729494 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00715359225465 0.056905535591 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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