Shopping is the favorite pastime for most of the young people. Why do you think is that. Do you think they should be encouraged to do some other useful activities?

Essay topics:

Shopping is the favorite pastime for most of the young people.

Why do you think is that.

Do you think they should be encouraged to do some other useful activities?

Nowadays, with a variety of options available in market, shopping has become the leisure activity for most of the Millenials because they feel relaxed and confident while purchasing these articles. In my opinion, the youngsters should be motivated to spend their free time in more productive activities rather than hopping from shops to shops to enhance their personality.

Shopping is one of the best stress-buster these days as it helps the people to relax their minds and boost their energy. Firstly, youth gets attracted to a plethora of items available in the market especially in the fashion industry. Several types of clothes are present which force youngsters visit malls and buy them. Secondly, when these young people start earning, they think that the best utilization of their salary is to go for shopping and spend on branded products which were earlier out of their budget.

According to me, these people should be made aware of other sources of entertainment as well. There are various other things which could keep them healthy as well as stress-free. For instance, joining any sports club will keep them fit and and at the same, they will be able to interact with the other people resulting in a better social life. Furthermore, young people should also be encouraged to go on vacations and explore magnificent places. It will lead to new freshness in their life and will create lifetime memories which are not possible by shopping.

In conclusion, these days shopping has become the most enjoybale thing for the young ones as they have more money to spend on themselves and keep them up-to-date. However, they should be told the benefits of other leisure activities like sports and vacations which would ultimately increase their social status.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 329, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'shops to'.
Suggestion: shops to
...ive activities rather than hopping from shops to shops to enhance their personality. Shoppi...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...re earlier out of their budget. According to me, these people should be made aware of o...
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Line 8, column 237, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: and
...ning any sports club will keep them fit and and at the same, they will be able to inter...
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Line 8, column 343, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...people resulting in a better social life . Furthermore, young people should also b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1507.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12585034014 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61135786287 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568027210884 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3825577148 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.923076923 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6153846154 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5384615385 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177844896473 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646387504128 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453797699526 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118127405108 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313019408714 0.056905535591 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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