Some countries encourage teenagers to have a part-time job and see it as a good thing, while others disagree. Give your opinion and explain both views
In some cultures, young people are adviced to start working during highschool, while in others, teenagers should focus only on obtaining a highschool diploma before hiring. Getting a job as early as possible adolescents can learn about adulthood and how to overcome its difficulties.In this essay i will discuss both views and support my opinion.
On one side,a temporary job might distract one’s attention from his primary responsability: graduating highschool. Therefore, at this vulnerable age, one can loose himself on track and give up school being more concerned about his new job.
For instance, one can get caught in a skilled job as carpenter which does not imply a highschool diploma, consequently, it will be difficult to continue his studies and achieve higher education.
On the other side, having a different responsability will add experience in their resumes.Moreover, these days, fresh graduates are facing a catch-22 situation: they need experience to have a job, but to have a job requires experience. To illustrate, a new graphic designer aspiring to get his dream job, must provide a portofolio with his work. However, if he was not, previously, involved in proffesional design projects, how could he demonstrate his abilities as an artist to a prospective employer? Furthermore, there are things that one can not learn in school. If someone knows how to become a good team player, he will find easier to fit in any work enviroment.
To conclude, I believe that working before graduating has advantages and drawbacks, teenagers should involve themselves in other responsabilities beside school to be prepared for maturity ages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1414.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35606060606 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18859307587 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.681818181818 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0712539869 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.545454545 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.09090909091 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151797731817 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478369308634 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0371600714186 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0741711146841 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402913463243 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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