Some countries encourage teenagers to have part-time job and see it as a good thing, while others disagree. Give your opinion and explain both views.
Some people think that teenagers should indulge themselves in part-time work as it could make them independent, and it could be a good exposure towards career opportunities. However, others believe that young people should not opt for temporary jobs, it will impact their academics as well as it can lead to a stressful life. I am inclined towards the former viewpoint.
On the one hand, a working student could have many benefits. Firstly, youngsters could bear the expenses by their own, which makes them a responsible and an independent individual. It will indirectly lessen their parents’ burden because they need not to worry about their children’s education fees. Along with that, they learn to manage money, and do not become a spendthrift. According to the U.S Department of Labor, 70% of American teenagers are self-made and accountable, and it is due to the temporary job. Next, it helps them gain knowledge working with experienced people, which will be added in their resume, it could give them excellent career opportunities in the future.
On the other hand, working students might not get enough time for studies. Similarly, due to much work they might not be able to balance their work with studies which could impact their academics and can lead to a failure in the exam. Likewise, as the young ones are not able to handle work pressure and studies together, it can result into a stressful mind. To exemplify, a survey report for teen magazine describes that 70% of students who combine study with a job are not able to achieve desired scores in studies, and the rest are unable to cope up with the pressure.
In conclusion, part-time job can make a juvenile self-sufficient, and can open door for opportunities. Also, it could have an impact on studies, and can lead to anxiety, however it can be dealt if students can balance their work and academics.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, likewise, similarly, so, well, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 7.85571142285 293% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1575.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96845425868 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82406455035 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529968454259 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 482.4 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.992147463 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1333333333 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0889520338568 0.244688304435 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0340601612721 0.084324248473 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399230099153 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0620780033966 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270504459607 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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