In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn.Discuss both views and give your opinion

Essay topics:

In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In Kazakhstan, there is a concern about people, whose income is exceptionally larger than the average value. Some politician claim that it is beneficial for society, while some social workers say that their income should be under regulation and restriction by authorities. This essay agrees with the idea of regulating and restricting these incomes.

The reason why large salaries bring benefits to the government is that people with that high income pay much higher taxes. This money could be directly used to maintain many areas of social life, including building roads, paying extra money to teachers, providing medical treatment with discount, allocating more scholarships and assisting jobless people. For example, in Europe, people who earn more than 100000 euro a year, are obliged to pay more than 50% of it to the government, which uses it to support unemployed people and give a scholarship to children from disadvantaged families, so that they feel necessary to the public.

However, some social workers think that the government ought to take control of high incomes. Resentment in society for inequality is the main reason for this opinion. The amount of money rich people spend has always caused dissatisfaction in lower classes of society. This situation sometimes leads to crimes towards wealthy people. For example, in Kazakhstan, one of the motivations, why people commit a crime, is the jealousy of becoming as rich as their victims, who have exceptionally large incomes.

In conclusion, after analysing, it is clear that even though uncommonly high salaries have some positive effects on economy, a sense of equality is more essential in a stable community, since people, who do not that much money, might get enraged once they see how rich people squander fabulous sums of money on luxury things.

Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business bring about the death of local communities.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'euro' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'euros'.
Suggestion: euros
...urope, people who earn more than 100000 euro a year, are obliged to pay more than 50...
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Line 7, column 228, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ince people, who do not that much money, might get enraged once they see how rich...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2743902439 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78459661113 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585365853659 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.6866087796 49.4020404114 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.571428571 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 7.06120827912 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279008766104 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0894997010977 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529738929218 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138782583743 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434911326468 0.056905535591 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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