In some countries, small town-center shops are going out of business because people tend to drive to large out-of-town stores. As a result, people without cars have limited access to out-of-town stores, and this may result in an increase in the use of cars.
Do you think the disadvantages of this change outweigh its advantages?
In many nations, small stores in the downtown tend to stop their businesses due to the customers’ trend of moving out to the mega malls in the suburbs and this leads to the rising number of cars to drive to those supermarkets. This essay will argue that despite the benefit of more vacant lands for recreational activities, the problems of congestion far outweigh this advantage.
The benefit of this shopping behavior change is more empty spaces because numerous small shops close and return the space to the owners. Governments can utilize those space to construct more recreational centers, such as a football pitch and swimming pool, to develop cities in a healthier way. For example, New York city has built more than 20 recreational complexes on the lands of closing stores from 2010 to 2015 and the rate of practicing sports of citizens in this city increased by 20% in this period. However, congesting on the highway during weekends makes residents enormous waste of time due to the significant increase in private transportation.
On the other hand, rocketing the number of car use to transport between out-of-center mega malls and cities causes a serious traffic jam in the weekend because people merely arrange their time to travel this far and shop the goods for hold week. As a result, people have to sacrifice their time to enjoy at home by being stuck on the highway for hours because the significant rise of cars and they cannot go to small shops due to its closing. As a study conducted by Harvard University in San Francisco city in 2017 showed that American shoppers spent more than 5 hours per week due to traffic jams at the weekend on the way to the shopping malls. Therefore, the benefit of more space in the city cannot compensate the time-wasting to the congestion.
In conclusion, I believe that the time issue congesting at weekend far outweigh the supposed more recreational activities replacing closing shops.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94224924012 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7531082018 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537993920973 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.6750164006 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.818181818 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9090909091 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27272727273 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169113777151 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634341109277 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692372877589 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0936488326068 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0670198539296 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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