Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society.
To what extent do you agree with this view?
Many people think that how the advertising industry is promoting their products are immoral and objectionable; I am a staunch supporter of this statement. This, I shall prove with the arguments in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, advertising manipulates people because they take the services of glamorous and successful people as brand ambassador to promote their reputation. Thus, people link these products with a higher status symbol. To illustrate, I Phones are the Apple products; a new launched often costs more than fifty thousand rupees and is famous with the high-end society. Hence, many people from a lower end or a middle class are attracted to buy this product to show their fake level. Though, its features are often similar to the previous one.
Furthermore, many advertisements aim their marketing towards children, such as giving out free toys or sugary drinks to kids. Stores namely, Mac Donald’s and Burger King are in the list, whose products are unhealthy and are connected to enhance obesity in youngsters. Though the government is trying to raise awareness in schools and in media, the impact on children is very minimal. The reason for this is that they advertise in a very persuasive manner and the children cannot differentiate between the sources. Therefore, the government should either control the advertisements or ban them completely.
To conclude, I would like to say that although advertising plays a key part in marketing products, however, advertisements should be regulated. Moreover, false or products posing a risk to health should be banned.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 241, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'phone'
Suggestion: Phone
... higher status symbol. To illustrate, I Phones are the Apple products; a new launched ...
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Line 3, column 420, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'class'?
Suggestion: class
...any people from a lower end or a middle class are attracted to buy this product to sh...
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Line 3, column 486, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... this product to show their fake level. Though, its features are often similar to the ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1350.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31496062992 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9675743652 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.633858267717 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6825573349 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4285714286 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1428571429 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127355837816 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.042020319012 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0283009044034 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0761212690125 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021894069352 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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