Some parents are worried about the increasing level of violence in TV, video games, and other types of entertainment for children’s leisure. How does this affect children? How do you think this problem can be tackled?
Nowadays children's entertainment activities such as television, video games and other media are augmenting day by day. But there is not denying that, violence kind of things also spike in current trend which is sensitive matters for parents. This essay will elaborate impacts of this phenomenon on child's life, and what measures should be taken to resolve this matter.
Firstly, it is an irrefutable fact that, children are attracted to video games and TV shows which involve fighting and shooting kind of activities because it is indulging them in great excitement and profound thrilling. In consequences, children learn negative things which create imbalance in society. Sometime they become stubborn and quarrel with their friends and family members.Secondly, if any child see violence on daily basis, then possibilities of crime rate will high in society as per psychological impacts. in results, parents have to bear consequences of changes in children behaviour.
However, this problem can be mitigated by efforts both parents's precautions as well as country's laws. some violence and crime related television shows and news should be prohibited by government. Moreover, Countries should impose ban on video games because its stimulate child to complete task and levels with perilous risk. For example, 'BLUE WHALE' video game had taken many children lives in entire world, and many country had expelled this game from networks. Parents should also keep eye on their children regarding their activities. If they found anything falsely, then immediate corrective actions should be taken.
In Conclusion, Entertaining media with violence has become hot potato king of question for parents as it affects child badly. However, there is plethora of measures are effective to alleviate its results. there is mutual efforts of parents and governments require to restrict hatred TV videos and violent games.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 130, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ia are augmenting day by day. But there is not denying that, violence kind of things also spik...
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Line 1, column 370, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...should be taken to resolve this matter. Firstly, it is an irrefutable fact that,...
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Line 3, column 253, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to negative'
Suggestion: to negative
...illing. In consequences, children learn negative things which create imbalance in societ...
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Line 3, column 253, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to negative'.
Suggestion: to negative
...illing. In consequences, children learn negative things which create imbalance in societ...
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Line 3, column 384, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Secondly
...l with their friends and family members.Secondly, if any child see violence on daily bas...
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Line 3, column 520, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...n society as per psychological impacts. in results, parents have to bear consequen...
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Line 3, column 600, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ences of changes in children behaviour. However, this problem can be mitigated b...
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Line 5, column 77, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...ed by efforts both parentss precautions as well as countrys laws. some violence and crime ...
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Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...s precautions as well as countrys laws. some violence and crime related television s...
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Line 5, column 412, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun country seems to be countable; consider using: 'many countries'.
Suggestion: many countries
...any children lives in entire world, and many country had expelled this game from networks. P...
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Line 7, column 206, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...are effective to alleviate its results. there is mutual efforts of parents and govern...
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Line 7, column 206, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are mutual efforts'?
Suggestion: there are mutual efforts
...are effective to alleviate its results. there is mutual efforts of parents and governments require to r...
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Line 7, column 265, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'restricting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: restricting
...orts of parents and governments require to restrict hatred TV videos and violent games. ...
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Line 7, column 313, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ict hatred TV videos and violent games.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48813559322 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79024442426 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623728813559 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4771997665 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.1875 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4375 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4375 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295192346271 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0850448668673 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464082092479 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168369629117 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441698016553 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 130, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ia are augmenting day by day. But there is not denying that, violence kind of things also spik...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 370, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...should be taken to resolve this matter. Firstly, it is an irrefutable fact that,...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 253, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to negative'
Suggestion: to negative
...illing. In consequences, children learn negative things which create imbalance in societ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 253, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to negative'.
Suggestion: to negative
...illing. In consequences, children learn negative things which create imbalance in societ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 384, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Secondly
...l with their friends and family members.Secondly, if any child see violence on daily bas...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 520, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...n society as per psychological impacts. in results, parents have to bear consequen...
^^
Line 3, column 600, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ences of changes in children behaviour. However, this problem can be mitigated b...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 77, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...ed by efforts both parentss precautions as well as countrys laws. some violence and crime ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...s precautions as well as countrys laws. some violence and crime related television s...
^^^^
Line 5, column 412, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun country seems to be countable; consider using: 'many countries'.
Suggestion: many countries
...any children lives in entire world, and many country had expelled this game from networks. P...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 206, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...are effective to alleviate its results. there is mutual efforts of parents and govern...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 206, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are mutual efforts'?
Suggestion: there are mutual efforts
...are effective to alleviate its results. there is mutual efforts of parents and governments require to r...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 265, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'restricting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: restricting
...orts of parents and governments require to restrict hatred TV videos and violent games. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 313, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ict hatred TV videos and violent games.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48813559322 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79024442426 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623728813559 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4771997665 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.1875 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4375 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4375 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295192346271 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0850448668673 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464082092479 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168369629117 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441698016553 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.