Some people argue Laws changes human behavior whereas some disagree. Do you agree with it?

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Some people argue Laws changes human behavior whereas some disagree. Do you agree with it?

An issue which often causes a great deal of heated debate is human behaviour may change by law, however, in this point how people change their behaviour from any legislation, in my personal view I do think human behaviour have a connection with the law. In this essay will analyse personal point and make a conclusion.

To begin with, many countries have to maintain law to keep their citizen peace and security. For example, in the Philippines, the government built up a strong death penalty on drug law to keep their residents avoid any drug effect, furthermore, they can live in good security and a healthy environment. In this point can tell law is not only protect people and also alter people’s behaviour.

There is also, however, some of the countries is not do so. For instance, in American gun law is too weak to protect their resident, in this view weak gun law it will cause many shooting violence, even more, people are live in insecurity place. As this point can tell how the law important with our life.

In conclusion, following the reason above can know how important people live in the security environment. The law does change human behaviour, however, kept the right behaviour should provide with the powerful law. In my view, I believe the law does change human behaviour.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, may, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my view, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1095.0 1615.20841683 68% => OK
No of words: 224.0 315.596192385 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88839285714 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61885441319 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 176.041082164 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549107142857 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 335.7 506.74238477 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.5911489983 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5454545455 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3636363636 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.81818181818 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242100090407 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102442218394 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652637853088 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158120998948 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329273407371 0.056905535591 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 78.4519038076 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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