Some people believe that children are given to much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work.
How do you think children should spend their free time?
Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples for your own knowledge or experience.
There is one thing that is always a polemic topic no matter where is discussed. Is Children’s education and how to take advantage of their free time. Most people think that the quality of the education given to their children is almost as important as how to utilize properly the children's free time. Many countries from South America have adopted a longer day at school similar to some schools in the United States or Asia. Countries like Chile or Venezuela, where children go to school from seven am to six pm are among those, which have recently changed to a longer journey at school. When the children go to their houses they have some time to do homework and little free time to spend doing other things. Nevertheless, getting a longer day at school have shown almost no impact in the academic results of the students comparing to other countries with a shorter journey.
When I was a student back in Venezuela, our school day starts at 7 am and by the 12 o’clock, I was on my way back home. I remember that teachers gave me a lot of homework; however, I did have free time to practice Baseball and basketball, as long as I delivered my homework on time. Moreover, my grades were good and I was always on top of my class. With this experience, I think that keeping the children for almost 12 hours at school it's not necessarily good unless, these long periods of time are used properly, not only focus on the academic side, but giving useful tools to the children that will help them in the future.
Finally I my opinion the parents should have an important role taking advantage of their children's free time. Sign him/her up into a sport, music lessons, dance school, learning a new language, not leaving them to waste the little free time they have. Because at the end of the day, time is not going, back and children grow up so fast.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, moreover, nevertheless, so, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1519.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53432835821 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43956399553 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537313432836 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1322885571 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.5 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9285714286 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333666134787 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127545429692 0.084324248473 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111802616617 0.0667982634062 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224974776038 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442744792798 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 50.2224549098 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 12.4159519038 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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