Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. How do you think children should spend their free time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Effective management of free time is crucial especially among kids growing up. Some argue that it is to be utilized for school related academic work, I disagree to this thought. I believe that there has to be a healthy balance between extracurricular activities and study time so that children can rejuvenate after they come back home and at the same time to polish their skills along with focus on subjects they struggle at.
To begin with, there is ample evidence indicating that pupils crave some hours away from books and all the hustle. The central reason for this is less attention span. After a daylong of education, it is advisable that kids are to be encouraged in exploring their interests in different fields of life and also refreshes the mind which is crucial for mental health. To illustrate this, an Oxford University report suggests that the age between 7-14 is where the attention span is lowest as compared to others and where the brain is still in the nascent stage and is to be handled with care. Therefore it is conclusively clear that study hours at school take a toll on pupil’s psyche and needs to be diverted on various other activities of interest.
Although there is a case for extra curricular activities acting as a revitalizer for children, the relevance of extra efforts on education cannot be understated. Pledging additional time to learning ensures that one stays ahead of the competition which has long term benefits. For example, a TIMES NEWS survey suggests that youngsters who have a score of 750 and above , have had studied for at least 4 hours a day leading them to a full scholarship program at a reputed colleges. Thus it is possible to state that some duration apart from regular school time will have resounding results.
To sum up, while I believe that young boys and girls are to be given free time to pursue their talents, using the leisure time effectively is vital in prepping them for later stages of life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, still, therefore, thus, while, apart from, as to, at least, for example, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79351032448 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61260419736 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592920353982 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.0100991004 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.0 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0769230769 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53846153846 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277373677149 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.093815300376 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563034518171 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179268738784 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648182118471 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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