Some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Every individual has a favorite leisure activity to relax their mind. It is opined by some people that to enjoy, recreational activities should be arduous. I partially agree with the opinion that only tough hobbies give pleasure. In this essay, I shall refer to some sociological studies as well as examples to argue contrary to popular belief.
Admittedly, the ones who acquire professional skills in their pass time activities and choose to earn their livelihood in that particular occupation would get easily bored if their work is not challenging enough to foster their interest in harvesting more knowledge. Conversely, they would become less passionate about their job as it would seem effortless to do. For example, if anyone interested in cricket has no competition or a goal to achieve, they would lose their motivation. Therefore, in some cases, hobbies are required to be hard.
On the contrary, if a job is not related to an individual's leisure interests, but despite it is simply a means of relaxation, difficulty in hobbies would deprive them of the energy and would consequently lack entertainment. In other words, after a hectic day at the office, instead of relaxing, if people would engage in arduous hobbies their physical as well as mental health would get affected. For instance, a study by National Biological Institute shows that the human brain requires an adequate amount of calmness and composure to work efficiently. However, tougher leisure activities would neither be beneficial for a healthy mind nor enjoyable.
To conclude, although difficult hobbies are advantageous for those who follow their passion and need constant encouragement, it could cause severe mental problems for some people by alleviating mind tranquility, thus, would not be pleasurable to any extent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an individual' or simply 'individuals'?
Suggestion: an individual; individuals
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, conversely, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, as well as, in other words, in some cases, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1525.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31358885017 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96781490523 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627177700348 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.9597258331 49.4020404114 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.307692308 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0769230769 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189603428438 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780241855224 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904628198903 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133252462972 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.066925177621 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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