Some people believe that money is the best gift for teenagers while others disagree Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Some people believe that money is the best gift for teenagers while others disagree.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In many countries, giving presents on birthdays, anniversaries or other special occasions is a convention. Whether presenting money as a gift is advantageous or not, is a debatable topic among some people. In this essay, I shall refer to some general examples and psychological studies to discuss both points of view followed by my opinion.

To begin with, it is intuitively obvious that during adolescent age, each person possesses distinct interests which makes it difficult to choose a present for an individual. In such cases, despite purchasing something that would be unuseful for the recipient, giving money as a gift would be a better choice. To exemplify, recent research by Human Psychological Unit has found that every 3 out of 4 people are not satisfied with the goodies they receive and prefer cash as a gift.

On the other hand, it is also possible that teenagers might misuse the money gifted to them. This is because at this age they are enticed by a plethora of tempting things that could be disadvantages for the adolescents. For instance, squandering on junk food that would eventually lead to health problems such as obesity and heart diseases. Besides, according to a study by the Crime Bureau, drug consumption is maximum among teenage boys and girls. Seen in this light, money as a gift seems to have certain drawbacks as well.

To conclude, although monetary gifts are precarious to an extent, from my perspective, if young people would be appropriately guided by elders, the demerits could be alleviated. In other words, teenagers should be fostered to save these gift tokens and spend the money wisely.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, so, well, for instance, such as, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1371.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05904059041 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88270066077 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638376383764 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.4369849647 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.461538462 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8461538462 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.69230769231 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270161837686 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0879806127577 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531463766086 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153818793443 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461287042826 0.056905535591 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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