You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good You want to tell how you feel Write a letter to the singer In your letter say how you feel about his her performance give details of your music related activities explain how you

Essay topics:

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel.
Write a letter to the singer. In your letter:

say how you feel about his/her performance
give details of your music-related activities
explain how you would like him/her to help you with your music-related activities

Dear Mr. Sood,

Last week, I attended the live music show at Electronic City and it was a delightful experience. Personally, I liked your performance the most. I am writing to express my immense satisfaction regarding your music.

For the first time, I went to a live concert and because of your splendid performance, it turned out to be a pleasant experience. The best part of your songs, from my perspective, would be your melodious voice. Moreover, the music and lyrics made it sound even better. In other words, the overall composition of your music was extremely satisfying.

Being a musician myself, I completely understand what amount of effort you have to put to make such songs. Since I am a lyricist as well as a guitarist, I work with some new singers in the music industry. A few days back, I released my first song on YouTube.

However, I have learned from some friends that you support potential singers and organize workshops to identify new talent. I would be grateful if you could help me to acquire some of your talents as you have always been an inspiration to me. I have attached a tape of my song and my music qualifications with this letter.

I hope you will acknowledge my application to participate in your music workshop.

Yours sincerely,
Jaksran Kaur

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ic qualifications with this letter. I hope you will acknowledge my applicatio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, well, as well as, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 32.9175257732 122% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1077.0 937.175257732 115% => OK
No of words: 223.0 206.0 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82959641256 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89615979519 2.54303337028 114% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614349775785 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 334.8 290.88556701 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.9884268095 44.8134815571 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.8 76.5299724578 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8666666667 16.8248392259 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13333333333 4.34317383033 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252214257327 0.216113520407 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807116384933 0.0766984524023 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497060441945 0.0603063233224 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141114253677 0.12726935374 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428060009688 0.0580467560999 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 8.37731958763 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.14 8.71597938144 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 41.2886597938 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 8.62886597938 81% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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