Some people believe the purpose of education is to prepare people to be useful members for society Others say that the purpose of education is to achieve personal ambitions Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Many believe the aim of education is more for preparing people in relation to the roles that they have to play in the societies. However, there is another group that insist the purpose of education is more about personal development and its effect on our lives to reach our ambitious. In my opinion, considering only one aspect of a phenomenon like education that has many, is not a correct approach. Both of these two groups of people only notice one aspect or one benefit of education and intentionally or unintentionally forget the rest.
In fact, a wide topic like education that has been developed in human societies during thousands of years, cannot be simplified to one or two purposes of it.
Nowadays in our societies, governments try to design a comprehensive education system to help people of those societies, to not only get successful in their personal lives, but also to train them for social life and to show them how they can play a positive role in their societies.
Indeed, a society cannot reach its goals if the people of that society could not move towards their positive ambitious. Therefore, we can claim a well educated society is a society that its members can reach their personal goals and dreams due to the education they received. These kinds of people at the end will return those positive results in their personal lives to the society.
In conclusion, It can be said there is not a single aim or something like the most important goal for an education system. However, a well-designed education system take care of all personal and social aspects of our lives and plan to help us to get successful in all phases of our lives.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1374.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75432525952 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71826122694 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494809688581 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.893876867 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.909090909 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2727272727 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45454545455 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278718529761 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113916236614 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0401665055892 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150923082309 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553782714637 0.056905535591 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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