Some people believe the purpose of education is to prepare people to be useful members for society. Others say that the purpose of education is to achieve personal ambitions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
While some people think that the main aim of education is to make children effective members for the population of a country in the future, others tend to believe that education is aimed at satisfying people’s desires to be the leaders or competitive individuals. This essay discusses both sides of the argument and then I will give my own perspective.
On the one hand, many people argue that the educational system should prepare children to become valuable members of society. This is because people are known to absorb and acquire any new information very easily and quickly during their childhood. Therefore, in order to raise the ethical and cultural level of the population, it would be more convenient and better to instil these qualities in the younger generation at school. For example, my nephew John, who was provided with many lessons on charity and helping unfortunate people during his study at school, has become a member or charity organization supporting senior citizens.
On the other hand, there are those who advocate the point of view that schools should help people to attain their own aims. Being a leader is known to be one of the main personal skills, which may affect people in a positive way. Had people been educated at school how to surpass their peers, they could become competitive enough on the job market. For instance, in Russia, many private schools have become very popular among affluent members of society since their curriculum is aimed at raising decision-makers and leaders.
In conclusion, I think the both sides of the argument have their merits. On balance, however, I am convinced that education should pay more attention to making children decent and helpful members of society since the society is a huge group of individuals who cannot exist successfully without the mutual support.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ersonal skills, which may affect people in a positive way. Had people been educated at school how...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, may, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09240924092 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68915135957 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584158415842 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.9488950043 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.583333333 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280902764199 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100723223028 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711468629153 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175057871403 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0874013350448 0.056905535591 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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