Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians, or sports stars) are paid too much money
Do you agree or disagree ?
Which other types of job should be highly paid ?
It is believed that currently some people think that entertainers have very high salary. In this essay i completely agree with this oppinion, because i always see living celebrity is glamour and full luxury.
In the one hand, the main benefit of work such as entertainers is you will be rich people. It is because they get much money from their salaries. For example in Television sometimes some news talk about celebrities income, i think it is too much. As result they have much money and can buy whatever with their income, such as luxury home, luxury cars, luxury bags, exspensive treathmen, and many more.
However, there are some drawbacks of this problem. Firstly, usually celebrity don’t have many leasure time.It is due to they have many schedule every day.For example in my country entertainers always work everytime, from morning until night. As result, they often tired and be sicks. Secondly, they regulary don’t have privacy. It is because they always work in front of camera. For instance they seldom have time to sad, cry, complain. As result many celebrity be strees, and have mental problem. It is important to celebruties have special time for holiday and have privacy area.
To sum up, where i stand, i believe that celebrity get income too much. It is so different with other jobs in my country. So, many people have goal to be entertainers. In my oppinion, some profession should get more much salary rather than entertainers. For example, doctors, teachers, police, soldiers. It is because they get more many responsibility, and have big role to development country. And in my statement their job is more important than entertainers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i think, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1389.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01444043321 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66271368748 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537906137184 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.5841912055 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.1428571429 106.682146367 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.1904761905 20.7667163134 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123625734317 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432608990345 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0377791489778 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.087246426023 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.034454000365 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.0946893788 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 50.2224549098 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.89 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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