When we are discussing the celebrities' incomes, it is noticable that some of these famous people gained excessive mount of money at their fields. I agree with the view point that these superstars are paid too much money compared with their contributions. Meanwhile, the jobs contribute to other people more should be paid highly. I will elaborate on my views as follows.
To begin with, there are some of the famous people are paid too much. The previous football superstar, Christiano Ronaldo, started his new career in Saudi Arabi League, which competition level is much lower than the major leagues in Europe, where this star began his fame. However, he earned so much in Arab that his income is almost double of the second most high salary football player Mbappe who won world cup in the year 2018. The gap is so huge,but the perfromance is not as well as he did in Manchester United or Real Madrid .That is the reason why the number of Ronaldo's fans is decreasing year by year.
Additionally, too much income by the minorities like supersters will shape people's attitude towards themselves in wrong ways. As for the celebrities, they art excellent at their own specialties, especailly in filming and music. While many of their fans like teenagers would like to chase the steps of their stars ,participating to the entertainment enterprise. These youth gave up studying at schools, instead , learned how to performance in training class. As a result, quite few of them would finally get a role in films or become pop singers. Most of them, would finally farewell to this field. The competition in this area is beyond their imagionation.
As my concern, those who working to help others more should get more salaries. Like policeman and firefighters , they put themselves in danger for protecting people's safety. These kind of jobs should be paid highly. Moreover, the scientific reseachers ,like the people who developing COVID-19 vaccines, should be paid more since they are preventing the virus from contactimating human beings. All of these jobs are venerable, and should get more based on their contributions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, moreover, second, so, well, while, as for, kind of, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1774.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02549575071 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77126411242 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600566572238 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.2978131233 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.65 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235112623272 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702090825782 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072551502515 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136819899442 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535629113298 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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