Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which other types of jobs should be highly paid?
It is thought by few individuals that entertainment industry mint more money than they deserve. Albeit, we cannot generalise everyone but I believe there are certain factors which advocates other professions which should also be paid handsome remuneration.
To embark upon,entertainment is very important part of our life.It is the movies,music,live concerts which keeps us alive.They helps us to rejuvenate our self. For instance,they bring out the vital biographies of legends who served their life towards the nation,describes their struggle in the initial days of their career ,somewhere they motivates the common public and enlighten them about the history of the nation too. To be more precise ,plethora of struggle is involved in the chores of celebrities. Moreover, career of musicians,dancers,sportsperson is for shorter span of time,thus if they earn more money for the risk they take.They undergo a lot of make-up to appear gorgeous on the screen which costs heavy,at the same juncture it have negative impacts on their skin.
However,their are certain other profession in the country which should be paid lucrative fee. Doctors,Army personals,engineers and accounting experts also deserves to be paid well to be an impetus for doing well.Defense team sacrifiece their life to safeguard the civilians. Furthermore, all the jobs which requires high responsibilities and sheer dedication should also be paid highly. Similar to the citing,to attract talent in such areas ,it is important to pay well.
To conclude,I agree to the notion that film industry is paid for what they deserve while at the same time there are certain other professions which can not be overlooked.It thus,hoped the government will regulate salaries in all the sectors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, thus, well, while, for instance, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1489.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47426470588 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.56075049618 2.80592935109 127% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621323529412 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.5589410571 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.363636364 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7272727273 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.81818181818 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 27.0 5.01903807615 538% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215948312449 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0924550188208 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0755104426241 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148086169537 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0647400549969 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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