Some people say that advertising encourages to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which view point you agree with. Give reasons with example.
People are divided between the opinion that whether companies sponsoring sports as a mean of advertisement is beneficial
or not. In my opinion, advertisement of products through sports has more disadvantages.
To begin with, sponsorship of sports is beneficial at certain level. Young children with a keen interest in any specific
sport are unable to showcase their skills to attract the eye of selectors in order to get selected for national team.
When companies sponsor sports at school or college level, students get a chance to play in competition at inter college
or inter school level and have a higher probability to catch eye of selectors. Sponsorship generates revenue for the
sports and allows to bear the expenses of arranging tournaments among different schools or colleges, which is not possible
from institution funding as it is limited. For example, Hassan Raza (Pakistan cricketer) got the eye of a selector
while playing at college level. He got the chance to play for Pakistan team at international level at the age of 16
which is still the record for any player to play at international level.
On the other hand, there are more commercial aspects of sponsorship which have negative effects. Many sports personalities
have huge fan following and these fans adopt their attributes without thinking about its effect especially young children.
Companies use the fame of the famous sportsmen to sell their products, who are enticed by handsome amount of money,
in fact they earn much more by advertisements than their salaries. Therefore to earn more money sportsmen agree to
advertise for any company and sometimes become their brand ambassador. Sometimes the product of these companies is
harmful for the health of people. For instance, advertisements showing the intake of carbonated drinks after sports.
In conclusion, sponsorship of sports for commercial purposes has more detrimental effects than positive
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Suggestion: However,
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Suggestion: many pediatricians
... products are artificial and condemn by many pediatrician and child welfare organization. On the...
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Suggestion:
...r hand advertising plays a vital role in improvising our lives. It is solely due ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, well, while, for instance, kind of, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1363.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99267399267 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83861750373 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.604395604396 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6529283601 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.909090909 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8181818182 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0909090909 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293602537662 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109737491273 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413996609859 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172402271363 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0235151575302 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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