Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing number of sports facilities. Other, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
While some would argue that opening more sports centers will be the best solution of public health improvement, I believe that these places’s affection on citizen’s health is small and governments should hold more workshop to educate their citizen, especially young people about properly health care.
On the one hand, building more sports facilities encourages people go to do exercise more often than regular. Equipment and space in each facility are limited, by increasing the number of gym centers there are enough stuffs for everybody. Therefore, people tend to go to those centers and do work-out rather than staying at home. For example, since moving to the condo and having a private exercise room last year, I has been going to do exercise almost everyday because that room has been less crowded and I has felt so comfortable to stay there. However, I believe this solution is not effective because it not aware people about the importance of health and hence this is just a waste of money.
On the other hand, in order to improve population’s health, government should educate young people about the dangers of being unhealthy. Children in schools could be taught about how to stay strong and keep their health in the best mood. They are also likely to teach their parents about the things they learned at school and adults will also be influenced by this initiative. For example, school children in Vietnam were taught about the consequences of being overweight and now they have one of the lowest number of diabetes in the world. I believe that this measure will be a long-term predicament because children and adolescents will be the root generation in future and education them in properly way is the most important thing.
In the conclusion, although opening more sports facilities is one of solution of improving citizen’s health and encourage people do more exercise, educating young people to aware of being unhealthy is a more preferable option.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 418, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...ng a private exercise room last year, I has been going to do exercise almost everyd...
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Line 3, column 455, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... I has been going to do exercise almost everyday because that room has been less crowded...
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Line 3, column 510, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...e that room has been less crowded and I has felt so comfortable to stay there. Howe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, so, therefore, while, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1669.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10397553517 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73765047952 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519877675841 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.1266899335 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.083333333 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.25 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195142671788 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723908334763 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558903426582 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121710178186 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384718378416 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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