Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some would argue that the addition of more sports amenities for the public ensures improvement in public health, while others say that it has negligible effects and hence alternate methods are required. This essay will argue that although this way is effective but has narrow benefits, I believe that in a broad perspective, public awareness campaigns are essential.
Many people advocate that if there are more sports centres, the overall public health will increase. This is to say that a healthy mind thrives in a healthy body and to become physically fit sports activities are imperative because doing sports on a daily basis keeps are person healthy. For illustration, a report published by the World health organization states that people who are not habitual of doing sports and exercise are more prone to diseases like cardiovascular and diabetes. However, I believe that there are a plethora of diseases which requires proper planning by the health department to upgrade general public health.
One the other hand, there are some health conditions which cannot be elevated by sports activities and awareness of the general public is required such as some pandemics and endemic illnesses. In other words, diet and proper exercise along with improvement in living conditions increase the health of the nations. For instance, the United Nation in 2017 states that the main cause of many gastrointestinal diseases in developing countries is due to the poor sanitary conditions. Therefore, I believe that if people know the importance of hygiene and a balanced diet, it will surely suffice the cause and eventually results in a healthy nation.
To conclude, although sports facilities bring a small number of changes to public health, I believe that public education is must so that they can practice a healthy way of living.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
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Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... sports activities and awareness of the general public is required such as some pandemics and ...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...clude, although sports facilities bring a small number of changes to public health, I believe tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1545.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21959459459 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7645272541 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530405405405 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 30.9499729636 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.454545455 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9090909091 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.63636363636 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363080431383 0.244688304435 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136829077272 0.084324248473 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0887254332393 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225159271605 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0683902360524 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.