Some people say that government should control the amount of violence in the films and on television in order to control violent crimes in society How far do you agree or disagree with this statement

Essay topics:

Some people say that government should control the amount of violence in the films and on television in order to control violent crimes in society.
How far do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Few individuals consider that the government should introduce a check or control in the films as well as on television programs to bring down the crime rate in the society. I vehemently agree to the conviction as actions of people are always dependent on what is being watched unlearn in their cores by them.
Firstly, competition in the entertainment industry has changed the standards and principles on which it used to run. Moreover,movies as well as series are used as a source of entertainment during leisure time similarly rejuvenate children with the hilarious plays. However, scripts are changed drastically with the introduction of violent content. While, all the teenagers spend plethora of their time on watching them. As a consequence,their learning and actions are driven to a negative direction therefore serving as an impetus to involve themselves into the wrongdoings.
Secondly, internet is rampant in all the remote areas of the country for the more people are able to watch such movies so propelling them towards performing the crimes. Besides this, they serve as an epitome to learn and perform such henious acts. As a result, women and children are not safe whenever they are out from the houses during night. There is a sharp increase in the kidnapping cases in the recent time.
To conclude, advocate the notion that content for any film or web series should not be improve unless it has been reviewed. Undoubtedly, government should intervene in this matter. Every broadcast should be monitored closely by the officials so that we can dream about the better and safe tomorrow.

Votes
Average: 4.1 (2 votes)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, however, moreover, second, secondly, similarly, so, therefore, well, while, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1343.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10646387833 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90566451334 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623574144487 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3505183965 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9285714286 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7857142857 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.85714285714 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157749701793 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482944438311 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656803728287 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0961106146504 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076401116559 0.056905535591 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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