Some people say that money can make life easier and more comfortable But others say that having a great amount of wealth can bring some problems What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of having a lot of money Give reasons for your answer a

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Some people say that money can make life easier and more comfortable.But others say that having a great amount of wealth can bring some problems.

What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of having a lot of money?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Submitted by shaan9888 on Wed, 03/28/2018 - 16:07

In today's era of exploitation, money plays an important role. One can fulfil all the basic needs only if they have wealth with them. Some of the individuals believe that having a lot of money can make their life luxurious while others think that people have to face some issues if they have a lot of money.

There is a saying that Every coin has two sides. Similarly, having excess of money has merits and demerits. Some of the advantages of having excessive money are explained as follow. Firstly, rich person can buy each and everything of their choice for example, luxurious cars, houses and etcetera and by fulfilling their desires, they feel satisfied and happy. Moreover, wealthy people can travel anywhere at their favourite places and they do not have to think before booking the tickets. Beside that, individuals having excess of wealth, they do not need to work and they can stay at home relaxing with their family. In this way, rich individuals are enjoying their life to fullest.

On the other side of coin, most of the people who are earning high amount refused to pay taxes because amount of tax imposed on them is very high. They prefer to keep cash at their homes rather than depositing money in banks, so they are saving money illegally. Wealthy people remain threatened that thieves might smashed inside their house and they live their whole life in worry.

In conclusion, I would like to say that every cloud has a silver lining. Although, having huge wealth has both benefit and loss. People can convert disadvantages to advantages by paying proper taxes and keeping their money in banks. But, it is the choice of wealthy people whether they want to live happily or end their life in anxiety and worry.

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Average: 6 (6 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS General Training

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, moreover, similarly, so, while, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1432.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77333333333 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29395340454 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0943523882 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.2352941176 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6470588235 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88235294118 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336320179361 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116557105088 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0963932821941 0.0667982634062 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230368313659 0.151304729494 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100577397976 0.056905535591 177% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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