Some people say the Olympics is not relevant in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Some people say the Olympics is not relevant in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree?

I have never thought about this much before but personally I disagree this atatement. I will truy to give main reasons to prove my point.

First of all Olympics Games give huge benefit to the country where there take place. For example, increase number of tourists, as a consequence grow up cash flow to the country and taxes. When Olympics Games where in Sochi Russian Federation in 2014 year my relevant, wife`s sister told about that this event gives him big opportunities of development their own business and city as a whole. Number of shops increase during Olympics Games, also of tourist much bigger/

Second of all Olympics Games have a positive impact on employed population, new employment opportunities. Many unemployed to find a new job for the period games, many new companies are opened. And of course it is perfect way for the government to get more taxes. I personally believe it is two main economical reasons which prove that Olympics Games are relevant in the 21 th century and of course give prestige to the country where games are held. Moreover it is a good thing to promotion all type of sports to young people

On the other hand we have negative aspect it is terrorism. It is not a secret than anyone big country has big enemies. And the Olympic Games give him possibility destroyed not only people and building l however also strike a country reputation and economical in general.

In conclusion I see several positive benefits in Olympic Games. This only my opinion but if we did not have sport activated we would not miss a lot of fun

Moreover it is a good thing to promotion all type of sports

Votes
Average: 5.6 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, for example, in conclusion, in general, of course, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1367.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77972027972 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62635828412 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.414928746 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6428571429 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.64285714286 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0907910521795 0.244688304435 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0312524910898 0.084324248473 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0296888910518 0.0667982634062 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0415655519501 0.151304729494 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0228805676954 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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