Some students tend to play computer games rather than do sports. Why is this? What can be done to tackle the problem?
Some students tend to play computer games rather than do sports. Why is this? What can be done to tackle the problem?
Modern world has different problems one of them is the fact that students tend to play computer games rather than do exercises or sport. We should find out why this happens and who is responsible for this issue. Also we are supposed to decade how we can change it to positive way.
First of all we are looking around and we will see that electronically friends are everywhere like phone? tablets desk top PC and so on. Everybody has gadgets in each family.
Second of all living in a computer age gives many benefits. Desktop PC or other gadgets helps us in our life, work or study. For example I used to go to the library If we need found something new, now I con find any useful information in internet. I used to draw my plans on paper now I am using Solid Works for my drawing and calculation. However many young students are obsessed with technology especially computers and computer games. My friends are students and many of them are real geeks. They own a bunch of computers and games. To my mind computer games are equal to drugs and disease.
Second of all playing to computers games easier than doing exercises or sport. You seat at home in comfortable armchair looking to screen and to sink into wonderful world of imagination. A lot of teenagers are stuck behind their computer all day. Unfortunately companies which make computers games promote it. Advertisement are everywhere on TV, street, YouTube and magazine. From year to year number of geeks increasing. For mine point of view we are supposed to reduce advertisement and promote computer games in general. And government should encourage this way.
Unless we can reduce number of advertisements computer games and increase promote sport activities, we will not be able to change situation in good way. However I hope we may change a future, we may change our live
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, for example, in general, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1624.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73469387755 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64980417123 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556851311953 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 16.0721442886 168% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.2975951904 59% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.9863836896 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 60.1481481481 106.682146367 56% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.7037037037 20.7667163134 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.18518518519 7.06120827912 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370704798259 0.244688304435 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10319779145 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150759898794 0.0667982634062 226% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270468973821 0.151304729494 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.33927408511 0.056905535591 596% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 13.0946893788 55% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 50.2224549098 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.3001002004 60% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.27 12.4159519038 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.58950901804 81% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.1190380762 67% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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